Last week we explored What the Ladybird Heard by Julia Donaldson through a variety of drama and retelling activities. This week we hugged the text by using it as a model to write our own version- What the Wiggly Worm Heard.
Here is Luke's fantastic story. We wrote the opening and build up on Wednesday then completed the problem, resolution and ending on Thursday.
Luke 1A
Here is another examples of our stories. Iria has written her the resolution and ending then edited it to make it even better.
Iria 1M
In Science, we are looking at how we stay healthy.
This week we looked at how exercise effects our body. We
carried out an experiment by exercising for a length of time and then recorded
how our bodies changed as a result.
Oliver 2S
Dear Luke, we really like how you used alliteration and ambitious adjectives to describe the characters. We think you could start using an exclamation mark
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ReplyDeleteWe read your story and want to give you two ticks and a wish.
Tick- good use of ambitious vocabulary (adjectives, simile, adverbs)
Tick-!
*Read it through to make sure it makes sense
1A
Well done Luke! We really enjoyed reading your piece of work because you used alliteration and connectives. We will try to use interesting connectives too! Maybe next time, to make your work even better, you could use generalising words (like often and sometimes) in your writing.
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